MARKER’S FEEDBACK
NOTE: This student WORKS FULL TIME in the field as an SA. He earned an
HD, but just “barely” (as I want MORE original opinion / thought / work).
A good paper, of which the only disappointment is the lack of original
opinion and analysis. It is clear that a lot of thought went into compiling
the various sources into a coherent whole, and while I agree that is a
kind of analysis, I will refer to it rather as a "synthesis". As such, high
marks for a great synthesis of the data, but disappointment for original
analysis within the data.
Your command of written English is so good that the occasional
grammar mistakes are almost "jarring". I suggest that you try to focus
on your Subject-Verb Agreement when using plurals (They are, He is,
etc.).
I applaud your excellent effort in telling a story progressively, and
providing a clear context for the various pieces of information in a truly
coherent whole. Of this aspect, I am most impressed.
SECTION
|POSSIBLE| GIVEN | PERCENT | MARK |
-------------------------+--------+--------+---------+------|
Structure
| 10.00 |
7.75 | 77.50% | (D) |
Content
| 60.00 | 50.75 | 84.33% | (HD) |
Use of Sources
| 20.00 | 17.00 | 85.00% | (HD) |
Presentation
| 10.00 |
9.50 | 95.00% | (HD) |
Adjustment
|
0.00 |
0.00 |
|
|
-------------------------+--------+--------+---------+------|
Totals
| 100.00 | 85.00 | 85.00% | (HD) |
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