Riordan Memo Evaluation
According to a recent memo from Hugh McCauley, Riordan Manufacturing’s logistical operations in China can result in savings by utilizing a separate shipping company. Relocation is required to complete this venture (Hugh McCauley, personal communication, August 18, 2013).. The memo at hand should be evaluated using criteria involving organization, clarity, tone, and writing style.
Organization of the memo should align corresponding to an introduction, discussion, and conclusion. The introduction addresses questions concerning why and what the memo is about: Originally Riordan Manufacturing believed logistics where sufficient; however, new evidence shows savings by relocating. The introduction of the memo is satisfactory. The discussion should have detailed development with highlighted statements in the form of bullet points explaining exactly what should be said: Highlighted statements in the memo are made available through bullet points; however, the bullet points are lengthy and over detailed. The first bullet covers current logistics and the second bullet covers a proposition for relocation as an alternative solution. The alternative solution has unresolved questions concerning the direction of the proposal: Although the memo states relocating will reduce costs, rates are not established with the new logistical service provider. This leaves unanswered questions that dramatically affect the proposition at hand. The conclusion should state what is next, when this will occur, why the date is important, and either a “thanks” or directive action: the memo states what is next, when it will occur (five year plan) and gives directive action (drafting strategic plans for impact on responsibilities and how to facilitate the relocation); however, it does not state why the date is important. The conclusion could be improved with information concerning why the five year plan is important and possibly provide more concrete dates.
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