October 16, 2013
My first paper was about how the hulk is monster and is misunderstood by everyone but he has the good intentions to save everyone. I basically summarized the whole movie and never really gave much support to my argument. I also rushed it and tried to do everything in one day so I gave myself very little time to revise it and make changes to it. I didn’t watch the movie again so I was getting all of my information and quotes from random websites. My argument was more of an observation of how people saw the hulk and how they felt about him. What I can learn from this: start earlier on my papers and research my argument properly, watch the movie (or read the book) instead of using sparknotes or imdb, take a break and come back later to revise, use proper sources that support my topic, and I don’t need to summarize the whole book or movie.
I did very little things right in this paper but what I did do right was make an argument, that I didn’t mean to be one, later in my paper. This gave me a good topic for my revised version and it helps me understand what the arguments are supposed to be like. I also used good grammar even though my diction was a little awkward when read aloud. I will be sure to read my papers out loud to make sure there is no awkwardness. Some things I did right are: made an argument without meaning to and I used good grammar.